Author: the_Dollhouse
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Review Rubrics
Title: 4/5
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Interesting
title. It’s not exactly original so I couldn’t award you full marks, though.
Poster/Background/Design:
5/5
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The
poster was great(: It really reminded me of the film ‘Mr. & Mrs. Smith’.
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Your
background was plain and simple, which is good as it keeps the readers focused
on the story and its content.
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The
colours suited the theme very well.
Description/Foreword: 8/10
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The
description was clear and to the point.
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The
foreword was captivating. You are able to capture the reader’s attention really
well with the fast-paced action.
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You
were able to give a basic image of the characters to your readers.
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Try
to state the genre and avoid typographical errors. This is the first page your
readers will be reading so make sure there’re no mistakes.
Characters: 15/15
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Characters’
emotions, thoughts and feelings for others were expressed.
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The
characters’ backgrounds were also shown.
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Descriptions
were well-developed.
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Characterization
was good on an overall.
Plot: 27/30
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Sexy
and fast-paced. The plot was really well-written.
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It
would be good if some scenes are dragged longer as it would slow things down a
little so it isn’t too rushed.
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The
flashback-within-a-flashback thing was clearly written. Good work~!
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E-X-C-E-L-L-E-N-T
work on the plot. Need I say more? ^^
Flow/Pace: 4/5
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No
problems with your story’s flow. The pacing was a little rushed at some parts
of the story.
Writing Style: 8/10
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You
are able to form scenes and show it to the readers instead of merely telling.
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Similarly,
settings were well-described.
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The
characters’ points of view were clear.
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Work
on your pace so that it doesn’t rush too much.
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Try
to avoid writing lines such as ‘BANG! BANG! BANG!’ to describe sounds, etc.
Originality/Creativity:
4/5
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It
was really creative, but not original.
Punctuation/Spelling/Tenses/Grammar/Vocabulary:
11/15
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There
were some typographical and grammatical errors.
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Your
punctuations and vocabulary were fine.
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You
had no problems in your spelling.
Bonus: 1 mark
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Enjoyed
your story~! It was really engaging(:
Marks Achieved: 87/100
Grade: A
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Corrections
There were some typographical errors. Grammatical
errors were mostly due to mistakes in tenses.
Side Note:
You
have creative ideas and are skilled in capturing the readers’ attention. You
write really well(: Keep up the good work~! ^^
♥ cheonsa
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