Author: Ayu
Requested
through Novice in Tomboyism
Novice
in Tomboyism Review Rubrics
Title: 5/5
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The
title was unique. It gives a hint to the readers on the plot, and also manages
to catch the attention of readers as it’s not a title commonly seen.
Forewords: 9/10
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The
foreword was able to provide information on the plot and characters without revealing
too much.
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It
was clear and organized, and it managed to fulfil the minimum requirements.
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A
warning was given stating that there was explicit Yaoi content.
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It
would have been even better if you listed the pairings in the story.
Plot/Originality: 17/20
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The
storyline was quite similar to typical high school stories.
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The
plot was not bad as you had direction. Meaning, your story has a storyline
which seemed to be heading towards an ending, which is good. (This also helps
your story’s flow.)
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You
were able to portray and use the characters in your plot well.
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You
managed to separate different scenes clearly throughout the story.
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Full
marks for originality.
Flow/Pacing: 7/10
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The
flow was smooth.
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The
pacing was quite slow for most of the story, but it was still acceptable on a
whole as it wasn’t to the extent it bores the readers.
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Some
of your sentences need brushing up. Try to avoid writing very long sentences,
as the tendency to have errors in long sentences is higher, and long sentences
slow the pace. You can write a few short sentences in-between to help avoid
that.
Grammar/Spelling/Format:
25/30
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There
were some grammatical errors. For example, you are supposed to write in the
past tense.
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Paragraphing
errors can be seen throughout the story. You need to begin a new paragraph when
a character speaks. Other than that, the format had no problems.
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Spelling
and typographical errors were little to none. Good job~! ^^
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You
made sense in and out of context.
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More
description (show, don’t tell) is needed.
Characterization: 18/20
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The
characters were well-developed despite having so many of them.
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The
characters’ feelings for others around them, and the way they react to
situations were shown.
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Readers
are able to get a basic background of the characters simply from reading your
story. This is very important in characterization.
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The
characters’ personalities were consistent.
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One
thing though: their flaws weren’t really shown.
Bonus: 3/5
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I
love YunJae. Hahas(:
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Your
explicit Yaoi scenes were at least passable.
Grade: 84/100 B
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Reviewer’s Note:
You
could try requesting for posters. A poster that looks professional could get
you more bonus marks. However, it was still a good effort on your part. As for
your writing, you can write well(: The only thing I’d suggest is that you try
to move the pace along. It was quite slow. Other than these, it was a good
story. All the best in your future works~! ^^
♥ cheonsa
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